Brooklyn Narrative Practice 2

Every picture tells a story.

2 years ago they're was a man named Bobby he was a farmer with his two brothers named Tom and

Harry  they loved farming together such as hanging out with them all day. One day when they were taking  out the weeds they're father Terry told them to grow some crops in garden. Once they were at the garden they started growing but 5 minutes later Bobby said to his two brothers “ hey have we ever been taught to do this job? then Tommy replied “no I don’t think so” so then Bobby and Tommy thought of it , 2 minutes later harry said “who cares we got told to do the job so just do it anyway” so the three brothers just carried on with their job.

4 hours later they were finally finished they were so tired and also really hungry so they went inside and had some dinner. The next day they did what they did every morning forgetting about the crops they did yesterday. 5 weeks later still doing they're jobs still forgetting about the crops they did 4 weeks ago finally they're  dad came out and asked if they had been checking on the crops. They all kept quiet then the dad said “ come on are you gonna answer me” Still no answer so the dad went to check in the garden when he looked at the crops his face looked terrified all he saw was a garden with brown corns  and yellow and brown droopy leaves hanging down. The brothers ran to the garden as fast as they could but the dad was already there. They're  dad was very very mad, “I told you’s to keep checking on it and never leave them for longer than 3 weeks growled the dad.

Since then dad had fired us from crop growing which we were actually glad about. A day after all that anger the three brothers apologised to they're father to say they're really sorry for ruining the crops. Then  they all gave their dad a hug.

                                                  The End!

here's what I have marked my self.

Brooklyn Narrative writing practice (Roller Coaster)

Every picture tells a story.

• Use your imagination and experience to narrate (tell) a story about the photo.
• Why are the people there?
• What are they doing?
• Why?
• What problem is caused?
• How is it solved?

Think about:

• where your story is set
• Who your characters are – what they do, what they say, and how they think and feel
• the problem and how it is solved
• The order of your ideas and how they are linked.

Remember to:

• choose your words carefully
• take care with your spelling, punctuation, and sentences
• edit – add or delete words or sentences to improve your work.

Problem Sammy was to short for the Saw roller coaster.	characters Ariana, Chloe, Sammy and Brooklyn
solution They told him to take some grow powder.	setting Dreamworld
Writing Goals speech question adding more detail tell me its a forest without telling me its a forest

On a hot scorching day Brooklyn , Bob , Sammy and Ariana decided to go  Dream World. Dream World had lot’s of awesome and fun rides. After 10 rides they started to feel very hungry after those  rides, so they went to the food truck and bought some food. After they had finished their food Sammy told them that he was going to the Extreme roller-coaster but Ariana said “no you can’t go on any rides until 20 minutes are over” then Sammy replied “but that's so long” “anyway why do we have to wait for 20 minutes” answered Bob “because we will get sick on the rides dah” Ohhhhhhhhh they all said.

As the sun drooped down very slowly Brooklyn looked at the time on her phone it had turned 2:30 “OMG it’s been an hour we can go now” said Brooklyn “we were supposed to go at 2:00 said Sammy, after 5 rides they took the chance to go on the Saw the ride they have dreamed about going on forever . when they got they're a very tall not really skinny  man said can I measure your height please, when he measured Sammy height Sammy was too short. Sammy started to feel very sad, then Ariana said “you guys go on i’ll stay here with Sammy”. Bob and Brooklyn looked at each other and then they said  “no we can’t leave you guys” so they ran out of the line and Brooklyn got her backpack “here Sammy drink this it’s magic grow powder promise me it’ll make you tall for the ride but it only lasts for 2 hours OK”

Sammy drank the magic grow powder 2 minutes later Sammy was as tall as Bob then they could all go on the ride whew  . after 2 more rides they decided to go on the Saw 1 more time but yes the magic grow powder had worn off.

The End!

               (oh and they all lived happily ever after but not for Sammy)

Farming fish retold by Brooklyn

1.Richard lives in a village called Togori on the island of Makira in the solomon islands. Did you know fish is really important to them. They do not buy thing’s very often they usually grow or catch.

2.  He has an uncle named Isaiah and is also the chief of they're village. He also taught the other people in the village how eat fish when the weather is to bad to go out to sea. His uncle Isaiah found some useful information from a magazine about farming fish so uncle Isaiah decided to make some plastic pipes so that the water would keep fresh and clean.

3. The pool’s that uncle Isaiah made took 1 and a half years to dig out. Most of their days they spend they're mornings and evening’s on the pools. When the pools a finished they have to be joined up to the river with pipes.

4. In the story Richard says his best  job is catching fish, He uses a traditional rod. Richard glad that he had helped his uncle’s plan succeed so well.